Talk:Spinel (Foxy02016)/@comment-26268426-20171110175337

Critiques:

We need to improve on some spelling. Weapons is how it's spelt.

We need to go deeper on relationships.


 * Why do they Stay away from everyone?


 * How were they like before what happened?


 * How do they treat people now?

That weakness would make a perfect addition to your personality section, but wouldn't fit in the weakness section.

Go deeper into Appearance. Describe how you imagine them!