Thread:Deyvan Salez/@comment-31628318-20170628103654/@comment-31628318-20170628111848

Deyvan Salez wrote: By unfairly judging your characters you mean critizing them? Well, I shoulda given you constructive criticizm. Welp, here it is.

Emerald: A corrupted gem that can somehow control itself and can teleport. Mary sue too. Make Emerald not teleport so fast, not fusion(At least not 4 man fusion), not vampire, not half human, and the corrupted part making Emerald lash

Green Diamond:Improve on personality, and make them have realistic personality instead of just "trusting for no reason" Mary Sue too.

Obsidian:Give her a better personality, better abilities to make her stand out and more backstory.

Moonstone/Sunstone:Improve on their personality, give them a backstory on why they transform, and they shouldn't be able to control time.

Amber:Make her have a more realistic personality, instead of just "Normally calm and angry", also she needs more backstory and what not. Mary Sue.

And lastly, I suggest you don't make MAJOR use of Canon characters within your characters. Have a nice day. Well in the premiere rp of Emerald he smashed a glass elevator because of the corrupted part he dose lash just not as much and he will be a fusion I have been thinking of this OC for a few years and finally found this place where I can use it plus If I edit Em's ability he won't get approve again Livi-Moonfosh said so

Ok I get what and why because why should he trust Emerald when Em is a crystal Gem

Only backstory for Obsidian because he is supposed to be not as strong

Well I changed it and there is the backstory on the page when they were fourming the sun and moon shone on the gem at the same time and they became Moonstone/Sunstone

Ok but is the whip when she is angry a good thing anyway thanks for the good judgeing this time